Young Offenders on the Camino de Santiago—Theoretical Background of the Learning Walks
Round 1
Reviewer 1 Report
Same as uploaded file.
Comments for author File: 
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Author Response
Dear Reviewer,
Thank you very much for your detailed comments, appreciation and remarks. We adjusted the title, used the literature references and were able to improve the language of some passages. 2 files were created to track the changes.
Added the reference to the Spanish efforts to use a learning path and the reference to the restoration of justice.
Unfortunately, we did not include your references to the historical view in the article after a thorough examination in order to stay close to the topic and not get bogged down in the introduction.
Nevertheless, we hope you enjoy our article.
Again, sincere thanks for your support.
Reviewer 2 Report
The article has an extraordinary quality and the subject is suggestive, interesting and motivating. I sincerely congratulate the authors, and I thank them for the interest that they study has aroused in me.
Author Response
Dear reviewer,
we are very pleased with the positive feedback. The title has been adjusted and some changes in language.
We thank you for the feedback and your support.
Author Response File: 
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Reviewer 3 Report
This interesting paper generally falls outside my areas of methodological competence, with exception of the theme of pilgrimage. I can only suggest that classically, pilgrimage was a long ritual-like experience usually undertaken by adults, not adolescents as such (some "adults" might be very young), sometimes with the possibility that the pilgrim's life might end on a lengthy, arduous pilgrim journey. In respect to theory, the transformational aspects of the ritual process can be understood via "liminality" (in the well known work of Victor Turner). As a stand alone article, this piece has little to do with religion, but beside other pieces on religion and pilgrimage, it could be a very valuable contribution. I would like to know more about recidivism rates, but the author implies this question is hard to determine. Again, the article's sociological method is out of my area, and so my question may not matter. Also, the practice of merely citing theory or results without elaboration and interpretation (e.g., Smith and Wesson 2001) would be unacceptable in the humanities, though perhaps not in the empirical social sciences.
Author Response
Dear reviewer,
we are very pleased with the positive feedback. The title has been adjusted and some changes in language.
We thank you for the feedback and your support.
Round 2
Reviewer 1 Report
“Theoretical Background of Learning Walks for Young Offenders”
Reader’s report for religions
Second Reading 11/30/21
I still think the language is labored and overwritten, too academic to be the attractive read this essay deserves. The work is solid, however, and the authors intelligent and sensitive researchers. I will certainly recommend the study to others in the field.
I approve the article for publications with the following recommended changes.
“Camino de Santiago’ should be among the keywords in lines 16-17.
“Compostela” has one ‘l’ in Spanish (correct on lines 311, 314, 628). The spelling with two ‘l’s is a British mistake widely repeated (lines 34, 90).
Line 54: Marche de rupture is French and should be in italics.
Line 63: no comma after ‘behaviour’.
Line 65: no hyphen or dash.
Line 65: no ‘Menawhile’.
Line 66: no “one the one hand,”.
Lines 79-80: “Juvenile courts can order participation in the pilgrimage as a condition and issue juvenile sentences upon successful completion.” Shouldn’t that be “forgive/forgo/erase juvenile sentences” rather than “issue [impose] juvenile sentences”?
Lines 112-113: “The ‘Problem Behaviour theory’ describes risk factors (biological, genetic and social background), …” Saying that some risk factors are genetic implies that there is a genetic disposition to misbehavior. Some readers will think that that’s dangerously close to racism (in America some idiots feel that blacks are more prone to crime). Reword? I understand “biological” as a risk factor when talking about hormonal imbalances normal for teenagers.
Lines 115-116: Is “parental cigarette use” really a risk factor? At most it’s a sign of careless health practices, but the same could be said of compulsive coffee drinking.
Line 116: “low intelligence/low school achievement” are two very different features. The second can be easily measured, the first is so conflated with social influences and opportunities that many researchers discount it entirely.
Lines 104-119: This whole paragraph jumbles biological and psychological stresses internal to the individual with family role models, educational opportunities and wider social context like the quality of neighborhoods. Legal problems are tossed into the mix. Can this be sorted into more defensible categories?
Lines 129-131: “While 4.4 out of every 100,000 males in middle adulthood (30 to 40) are suspected of committing a crime, the figure for those aged 18 to 21 is 8, almost twice as many in Germany (Bundeskriminalamt 2019).” Does this mean that all (European?) males in that first age range (30 to 40) have likely committed a crime within those ten years of their life, while those aged 18-21 are almost twice as likely to commit a crime during that 4-year interval? It also says that in Germany there are twice as many offenders 18-21 years old, which would put their rate of criminal incidence at 16 per 100,000. Is that what the authors meant to say?
Line 146: ‘training” has no plural in English. Do the authors mean ‘instruction’, ‘personal coaching’ or something else?
Line 164: Is “dollar” a reference to American currency or a generic term for Deutsch marks, French francs, euros, etc.?
I will stop here, but these are some of the issues that a careful editor could help with throughout the entire article.
I repeat that the research is solid and valuable, worthy of publication and a wide readership. My suggestions are only meant to help make the essay more appealing and ultimately more influential.
Author Response
Dear Reviewer,
are very much indebted to you for the recognition, appreciation and your commitment to improve the article. We have implemented your comments and commented on them in the attachment.
In addition, we were again able to have a person and teacher very well versed in the English language read the text. Some changes are related to this. We also had a native speaker read the text again.
We hope that we were able to limit your concerns in advance of publishing the paper.
With kind regards,
Author Response File: Author Response.pdf
